Mansion Kids

I'm writing a book!! Finally! 

So this is based off of stories I used to tell my brother and sister when we were kids. I've included the text of the book below for your enjoyment (just typed, not in book form yet). I'm working on illustrations right now, and since I'm not the best artist, it will probably take me a month to finish. 

Rebekah, Robby, and Angela lived in a mansion on the top of a mountain. Instead of their own rooms, each had their own floor. Rebekah had a room to play with her cat, Angela had a room to play with her dog, and Robby had a room to play his trombone. The mansion also had a firepole, a robot cook, and a roller coaster down the mountain. Besides that, the mountain was hollowed out and there were even more rooms inside. There was a ball pit room, a rope course room, and an antigravity room. Because the mansion was so wonderful, the kids had to be careful not to let strangers inside because they might try to steal things. One night, the mansion kid’s parents were out on a date and the doorbell rang. On the porch was a man with an egg shaped head. “Hi, Kids! I’m Bill the Inspector,” he said, “I’ve come to inspect your fire alarms.” “I’m sorry, we can’t let strangers inside,” they said politely, and shut the door. “I don’t think he was telling the truth,” Rebekah said, “I think he is trying to steal something.” The mansion kids waited for a few minutes, and then peeked through the curtains of the front window. Bill hadn’t left. He was sneaking around the side of the house with a crowbar, trying to get inside. “What are we going to do?” Angela cried. “Let’s trick him into going downstairs and get him stuck in one of the rooms,” Robby suggested. “Great idea,” Rebekah exclaimed. Soon the kids heard Bill come through the back door, using a crowbar to break the lock. “Let’s go downstairs to the money room and count the dollar bills,” Robby suggested loudly. “Okay,” Rebekah and Angela replied. Bill fell for their trap and quietly followed the mansion kids downstairs, underneath the mountain. Suddenly, the kids began to run down the hall and into the last door on the left. Bill ran, too, because he really wanted to find the money room. But the kids had shut the door. Bill shouted, “Hey kids, it’s Bill the inspector. I’ve come into the house and you can’t stop me now! Tell me where the money room is.” “We’ll never tell, Bill.” The kids shouted back. “We’re not afraid of you.” That made Bill angry so he broke through the door and rushed in the room, only to fall face first into a ball pit. The mansion kids were already on the other side of the room, where there was another door. “You can’t catch us, Bill.” They teased as they ran through the door. Bill stood and tried to follow them, but he tripped on all the balls and finally had to crawl to the door. The next room was not the money room, but a rope course. The floor was actually a trampoline, so if you fell off the ropes, you wouldn’t get hurt. The kids swung like moneys across the room to the door in the middle of the wall, but Bill fell after the second rope. After bouncing and bouncing, Bill finally was able to grab onto a rope again and swing his way to the next door. By this time he was very tired. But the last room was the anti gravity room! The second door was by the ceiling. The kids had been in the room many times before, and they had learned to swim through the air anywhere they wanted. But Bill was so far behind he did not see the kids and he could not figure out how to move forward. So he floated straight up, and was stuck at the top. “Help, help, let me down,” he yelled. “Oh, we will let the police do that,” the kids said.  So Bill was arrested for breaking into the house, and the mansion was safe once again.

Rhetorically,
Rebekah